coolshannie
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- Mar 18, 2006
Yup this is probably the wrong place to put this but im just so.. curious....
My friend is such an amazing writer and she wrote this poem it isn't particularly about her nor me. She said pieces relate but not all of it.. i was just wondering do you think she is good or is it just me who thinks this? Would you like me to post more things she has written? She doesn't think she could ever really make a career or anything out of it.. she just kind of does it for fun.. but i think she is amazing...
this is just a rescent poem that she has written.
Just Another Moment in Time
Time passes,
You stand there staring into the bitter darkness
Does he see you, does he even hear you?
Even when you stand out loudly cheering, there he stands.
You stand letting time pass as though you arent on land.
Time passes around you as water rushes towards your feet.
Only him in your thoughts, only he can make your heart beat.
Is it you? Is it me? Is it someone standing there saying they really care?
Time passes you, time you thought had stopped just seems so unfair.
If you stand there staring in that darkness the light will never show.
He will never come to realize it, dont put yourself at such a low.
Cant you see that light through the bitter darkness?
The light that shines so faintly in the common Charcoal of night,
Yet time still passes unable to stop unable to be controlled
You stand still staring at something so unrolled.
Does he see you? Can he hear your plea?
You are stretching yourself youre going to pay the fee,
Yet you stand letting time pass letting life go by.
Do you see the pain that he caused, the loose ends un-tied?
As you stare into the bitter darkness you just dont realize,
You just dont realize life is passing you.
And with every moment, every second of time that passes,
Life passes you by.
My friend is such an amazing writer and she wrote this poem it isn't particularly about her nor me. She said pieces relate but not all of it.. i was just wondering do you think she is good or is it just me who thinks this? Would you like me to post more things she has written? She doesn't think she could ever really make a career or anything out of it.. she just kind of does it for fun.. but i think she is amazing...
this is just a rescent poem that she has written.
Just Another Moment in Time
Time passes,
You stand there staring into the bitter darkness
Does he see you, does he even hear you?
Even when you stand out loudly cheering, there he stands.
You stand letting time pass as though you arent on land.
Time passes around you as water rushes towards your feet.
Only him in your thoughts, only he can make your heart beat.
Is it you? Is it me? Is it someone standing there saying they really care?
Time passes you, time you thought had stopped just seems so unfair.
If you stand there staring in that darkness the light will never show.
He will never come to realize it, dont put yourself at such a low.
Cant you see that light through the bitter darkness?
The light that shines so faintly in the common Charcoal of night,
Yet time still passes unable to stop unable to be controlled
You stand still staring at something so unrolled.
Does he see you? Can he hear your plea?
You are stretching yourself youre going to pay the fee,
Yet you stand letting time pass letting life go by.
Do you see the pain that he caused, the loose ends un-tied?
As you stare into the bitter darkness you just dont realize,
You just dont realize life is passing you.
And with every moment, every second of time that passes,
Life passes you by.
